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#721 Honey Boo Boo

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Posted December 24, 2012 - 10:10 AM

Foreveryoung where you at rap battle me right now
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Posted January 31, 2013 - 01:07 AM

We gotta survive.../
as I record this track I'm probably goin' through the hardest time in my life/
How am I supposed to sit by on the side and watch you die?/
The tears in my eyes/Don't provide enough light but allign fright/
Nothing seems right, anymore/
I'm sitting on the sidelines... this colorless life, is deprived, of butterflies/
And everytime, I try, I can't get HIGH enough to climb.../
Somebody give me light, to start the spark to bring some meaning to this night/
We gotta survive.....
We
gotta move on, keep our heads up and give some insight/
If we're not doing this for change then we might as we'll, die/
After we've lived our pleasure-OUS, lives/
That were centered and eased... around the central thesis of your greed.../
This, suffering.... suffocation... is locusts, that are cloaking and choking me.../
I can't express TRUE [expletive] on the mic appropriately.../
It's non-negotiable/
We can't be anti-social or swim in shallow/
I give advice, but battle.... cuz the words are hard to swallow as they're hallow and they scatter/


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Pass me the mic/
Pass me the wine/
Drink a few, give me some time, I'm drunk and need to spit a rhyme/
Not from the wine.... but from the poem foam, I overbite/
When I light that nitrite/ To burn, acid and fox rhymes, to hog up all the oxide/
So I guess I'm just....... oxygen deprived/
So let me draw a line/
I mean spit one...
The target is in sight/
I'm shooting missles...
They miss you on purpose my words enough bring the murder through/
Gotta reload -- pass me a similie/
Like an art gathering, I'm painting you a masterpiece, subsequently/
Equaling a flow of words that splash waves in your face a distaste/
Because a disgrace dissed and disintigrated on an iron plate/
A cleaned up version for you wanna-be fakes...
I don't wanna be great - I can only be who I am/
And who I is/
I don't want any of your business or fake definitions, you're summary of what a [expletive] is/
Oh wait! That's a definition...
That's a contradiction....
And that is the definition of what a hypocrite is/
That's what you are -- don't conclude based on condition,
most of your facts are all fiction/

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Posted May 23, 2013 - 09:19 PM

 
 

The tears of an angel remind me of the elder tales
I've got a knife in my hand thinking Cain and Abel
But what's right is a chance, not the pain and fables
Seeking light at a glance, calculating angles

Space and time are the fractals in design
Space and time are just fractals by design
Space and time with your mind can reallign
Associated energy, that's assigned

The naturalism multiplies, in its early prototype
The dawn's sight places beauty in the eye

With replies from the birds that make the humble cry
As the standerby rhymes


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Posted August 12, 2013 - 08:58 AM

Time constantly passes by, contemplate all the things that I should have done with my life

Take all the fault of mine alone, stay temperamental but steadily strong, as life goes on

          Keep a tight grip on my sins, as I do not need repent but to deal with admission of guilt

                 while I face the karma and punishment that awaits my fate

welcome the Jehovah witness constantly knocking on my doors, only left standing without rebuttal

                    Now take a step back, aftermath only minor setback 

                       mortal being many question left unanswered

always reminded that it lies within oneself, as I proceed to meaning of life and strive for everything right

                         rags to riches that was my primarily concept

head clearer than water, so take my mind to realization and futhermore makes sense

              blood, sweat, and tears all these 25 years that I have lived

many times had my back against the wall, path awaken when I never gave up

                          gets hard when those I love continue to fall

              dealt a bad hand, only to give motivation to this capable man

high beams stay blinding, endured the stress and pain and stay grinding

                                              heart of a lion



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Posted August 12, 2013 - 11:09 AM

lyrics go deep, Jee. that's where it's at, respect.




Seeing reflections in the lake/
Am I really just a snake?/
A fake with great traits morphed blank...
Pure deception/ Rhyme inception/

Decorating halls with the tears of the fallen/
The darkness is blinding, the light still is stallin /
And how they mock us...
I'm just lost in these spacious places while the evil haunts us/
I'm full of love but feel like a monster/
I know I was wrong, but still act a baller/

Truth is something seldom in this age/
Each lie told is a blow to my rib cage/
This [expletive] is insane
Goin after Husane while we ourselves are inhumane
Falling buildings from the planes, to a grave
This life is so hard but we gotta stay brave....
The truth is so real, so we gotta pave change
This life is so hard but we gotta keep face
The truth is so real, though it's found in a maze...

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Posted August 29, 2013 - 06:12 AM

JEE and Wade would I be wrong to say you have Em influences?



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Posted August 29, 2013 - 08:57 PM

I wish I were creative enough to write raps

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Posted August 30, 2013 - 09:54 PM

JEE and Wade would I be wrong to say you have Em influences?

Sort of, didn't really listen to Em actually only certain songs like 911, mockingbird, stan, lose yourself, superman, the way i am. Listen to more of Pac, Bonethugs, Do or Die, Ice cube, Nas, Dmx, Snoop, Twista, etc. Wish I was influence more of Eminem style, my rap would be way better. :laughing:

 

I wish I were creative enough to write raps

I'm sure you can put some good rap, I'm one of the worst on here, but it doesn't deter me, because I'm not trying to be a rapper and I'm not making money off this either, -Wade- is dope.



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Posted August 30, 2013 - 10:04 PM

This is a dedication to my mom, the special person that helps me carry on

Through the toughest times showed me the error of my ways, when I believed I could never be wrong

Let me pour my soul out all over this song

Hi mom remember when I was younger, I was hard headed than a mother

Causing havoc here and there but you keep me from going under

Your wonderful, powerful, authoritative voice struck like thunder

I often wondered why you stuck by my side, when I always wandered, and made infinite blunders

Naïve causing you stress for new shoes, when you work hard to provide our family food

Appreciation to you is long overdue

Underappreciated, underappreciated, yeah that’s you

Hope and pray you’re still around for me to make it up to you

Forever you hold a place in my heart, wish I could take back all the tears and tissues

Feeling down and out but as soon as you speak everything turns into a non-issue

Hope and pray mom, that a person such as yourself, who’s undeniably bless, would never be taken away from this world, for me to write down R.I.P I miss you

Please pass back the tissues



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Posted September 02, 2013 - 06:58 AM

I see the lyrics but can you put therm together on a beat and go continuously

 

 

BC I know people who can write, but when I put on a beat, they find out that there rhymes aren't practical whatsoever, and they can't say then  because they are either to intricate or whatever



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Posted September 02, 2013 - 10:56 AM

I see the lyrics but can you put therm together on a beat and go continuously

 

 

BC I know people who can write, but when I put on a beat, they find out that there rhymes aren't practical whatsoever, and they can't say then  because they are either to intricate or whatever

All valid and may be true. Depends on the beat/instrumental and how I flow or rap. I know some people who listen to the beat first then write out their lyrics. My voice is normal not deep or high. I need practice to learn how to ride a beat like Makaveli. I just write whatever comes to me and I feel like, so I'm in the zone of not being able to transition the lyrics with the beat. :thumbup:



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Posted September 02, 2013 - 12:17 PM

I need to start writing again


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Posted September 03, 2013 - 06:22 AM

All valid and may be true. Depends on the beat/instrumental and how I flow or rap. I know some people who listen to the beat first then write out their lyrics. My voice is normal not deep or high. I need practice to learn how to ride a beat like Makaveli. I just write whatever comes to me and I feel like, so I'm in the zone of not being able to transition the lyrics with the beat. :thumbup:

I feel ya, I would just download a few instrumentals and practice converting rhymes you already have and seeing how they would sound on the beat.

 

When rapping, you have to put on a voice, or make your self have an accent or view it as acting a bit. I think most rappers "add" something to their voices when creating



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Posted September 03, 2013 - 11:58 PM

I feel ya, I would just download a few instrumentals and practice converting rhymes you already have and seeing how they would sound on the beat.

 

When rapping, you have to put on a voice, or make your self have an accent or view it as acting a bit. I think most rappers "add" something to their voices when creating

Indeed, great guidelines, but as I stated I'm not trying to be a rapper or record anything, I do it for fun.



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Posted September 04, 2013 - 12:09 AM

Nighttime suppose to be sleep, but I'm up on post a rhyme

peeps tellin me stop wasting my time puttin out wack rhymes

ignore them and stay spittin like them tobacco user

I tell them beggars cant be chooser

thinking of my nightly routine before i go to sleep

hop in the shower and possibly eat

brush teeth then maybe count the sheep 

alright im beat

damn its time for me to sleep



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Posted September 06, 2013 - 11:47 AM

I need to start writing again

Just notice the peep my music :clap2:. I do this for the money, kuz the money is the motto, I live for my family, kuz family is who I die for. Nice



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Posted September 15, 2013 - 12:00 PM

JEE and Wade would I be wrong to say you have Em influences?

 

I don't think you would be incorrect in saying that. When I began rapping, I never intended to get rich from it and promised myself from day 1 that I would always do it just for the music. So I have been studying various styles over the years and have even been reading some literature written by rappers, including Clipse, Cypress Hill, Nelly, Public Enemy, Onyx, and a few others.

 

In terms of structure, I would say I am most influenced by Eminem.

In terms of style, I would say I am most influenced by Nas.

In terms of content, I would say I am most influenced by myself, but am relatable to Immortal Technique, Deltron 3030, and Canibus.

 

BC I know people who can write, but when I put on a beat, they find out that there rhymes aren't practical whatsoever, and they can't say then  because they are either to intricate or whatever

 

Depends on the beat/instrumental and how I flow or rap.

 

Both are great points. Writing and rapping are two very different things... in fact, some of the sickest in the game to spit it have spitten ghost written material. Anyhow, there is actually an art to sounding good on the beat. It consists of two things:

 

1) Syllables per bar

2) BPM

 

It's all about a syllable count in pair with the beats per minute on the instrumental. As BasketballIQ stated, somebody can write great stuff, but it might not sound good. This would be because the syllables are out of place, and therefore, there isn't any flow.

 

Bar 1 (12 syllables)

Bar 2 (8 syllables)

Bar 3 (9 syllables)

Bar 4 (5 syllables)

 

Some people rap like that ^, and while they have great written material, you just aren't going to get a flow like that. There needs to be more of a pattern. For instance:

 

Bar 1 (12 syllables)

Bar 2 (8 syllables)

Bar 3 (12 syllables)

Bar 4 (8 syllables)

 

When Eminem gave the example of rhyming "Orange" with "George's door hinge" in an interview, he was able to do so because Eminem breaks up each and every word down into syllables. There is no direct rhyme for orange, but once you break down the word into syllables, you can rhyme it with a lot of things.

 

This brings us to the BPM. A faster BPM, like 120, may be meant for a fast rap, like BTnH. A slower BPM, like 60, may be meant for something slower that is chopped n' screwed. It really depends on what you are going for.

 

Writing rhymes gets more and more advanced as you progress. You start using "multi-rhyme" placeholders within a single bar, so that you are playing with two or more rhyme schemes/patterns between bars. Placement becomes crucial. For example:

 

(1 rhyme scheme/pattern... rhyming "ock-ot")

 

But to her shock she was shot up on the block,
she sat up at that spot and recovered from the glock

 

(3 rhyme sceme/pattern... rhyming "oted" AND "ous" AND "ose/less")

 

Emoted, promoted, enormous, devoted with purpose
Noted, misquoted, amorphous, imported what's worthless

 

Notice how orange is the third word in each bar, they have the same amount of syllables, and they rhyme. That is one "placeholder," a three syllable word ending in "ous." The above can be represented like this, with variables:

X1, X2, Y1, X3, Z1/

X4, X5, Y2, X6, Z2/

 

Your ears will hear the red, orange and green as three separate rhyme patterns, if you will. Some of the greatest lyricists are always using 3-4 rhyme schemes/patterns within their bars, making them content filled and "flow-satisfying" to the ears.

 

This is all Eminem does. Take a look at Bitterphobia:

"Rammed and squooshed, slammed and pushed, crammed and mushed"

 

Rammed, slammed, crammed

Squooshed, pushed, mushed

 

But what's right is a chance, not the pain and fables
Seeking light at a glance, calculating angles

 

You want to make sure you have near identical syllable count for each bar, or some sort of pattern (ESPECIALLY for fast rap). Look at Twista. If you count the syllables of each of his bars, they are near identical. It is nearly impossible to fast rap successfully if there is not a pattern amongst syllables.

 

From Twista's song "Mista Tung Twista":

 

Pumpin a rhythm, a lyrical styler (10)

My tongue be flingin a funky pile of (10)

Lyrical rhymes that's breakin em off in the mind, I be flowin em holy, I'm (20)

Kickin the funky Islam, my lyricals slippin  like petroleum, slowly I'm (21)

Pumpin the flow of the lyric, I'm breakin em off with the radical texture (20)

 

It's all about syllable count, placement, and practice. With this stated, I'll leave a few bars...

 

 

Who is the king? Me?

Dreams of guillotines, murder scenes, bloody themes, evil streams, flowing free...

This is why I breathe.

To put a stop to these things, end the greedy deeds, sponsored by the growing thieves...

 

I need some poetry...

A poet in a tree, on a killing spree, with his words by the way he speaks.

Thanks for knowing me...

A homie's who I see, surely feeling free, with his words by the way he speaks.


Edited by -Wade-, September 15, 2013 - 01:24 PM.

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Posted September 16, 2013 - 05:28 PM

Let me smoke the substance
Let the subs hit, ask for silence
Preaching peace, then some violence

Diplomatic defiance, automatic tyrants
Problematic mindsets tap the wires

Extinguish fires
Distinguish liars

Stoic, non-heroic, clearly foldin'
Some blunts I'm rollin', didn't know it
Crazy stunts unknown to orbits
I'm saying nothin', rolling cryptic with the coder's function

Going dark on the net with a bash script, smash [expletive],
Time-lapse reactive...

Speaking geek, on a networked street, running deep
Packets flowing free, captured by the PRISM stream
Stealing massive C.R.E.A.M.
Botnets and nasty things

Crackers and hackers are larger than these packet thieves
Malware and trackers are planted by these packet thieves
Cryptors and packers, intializing vector keys

[chorus]
An emcee from the sea with a destiny
Smoking trees, feeling free, without hennessy
This beautiful life, deprived by a rusty knife
This musical mic, restored from its dusty life
So what's it like, to take your final breath?
We all find peace at the end of our death
[/chorus]

Influence pubkeys, smash the stack and fail the crypto
Influence thug dreams, pass them crack and slash their info

USA Today reporting on the NSA
USA, today, extorts in many ways
Give the DEA, access to the database
Let the CIA, practice on a foreign base

Give the FBI, rights to commit crimes
Inject the MSI with malicious java bytes
Makes me wanna write on how you might shut down a site
Out of fright from the 8 lava bits that are spit on the lines

The conscious minds cry
While the prominent ominous die

Security conspiracies, we're privacy entitled
Theories of their mysteries, I'll logically remind you

Queries of statements with history maliciously ripping you
critically, specifically re-considering things politically

[chorus]
An emcee from the sea with a destiny
Smoking trees, feeling free, without hennessy
This beautiful life, deprived by a rusty knife
This musical mic, restored from its dusty life
So what's it like, to take your final breath?
We all find peace at the end of our death
[/chorus]


Edited by -Wade-, September 16, 2013 - 07:26 PM.

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Posted October 14, 2013 - 06:10 PM

Jee is MIA



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Posted October 20, 2013 - 09:40 AM

My name is ham and i go haammm.

 

 

OOOOH KILL EM :laughing:


Edited by Ham, October 20, 2013 - 09:41 AM.

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